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    Here's my final version pending any major flaws putting it up here for last minute criticisms. Also the organizer informed me by email that linking to external sources for game stats is fine. Giving a treasure value isn't much of a game stat.
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    That looks good geamon, very classy.

    In the fine details you have "...this document is release under." I think you missed a 'd' in "released under."
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    Thanks Jax exactly what I needed. Small details I couldn't see.....It's hard having a balance of decor because it can easily become over bearing, I hope I've achieved that.
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    At the bottom, "referenced" is missing an "e".

    Encounter 1: It should be "PCs", not "PC's". Styles including unnecessary apostrophes in plurals were obsolete a couple of decades ago and were dubious anyway. "1980s", not "1980's" unless it is a possessive. Also, there should be a comma after "PCs". Actually I think you mean "Upon the cultists engaging the PCs", since the order seems wrong for the statues. The "a" in "searching" is missing.

    Encounter 3: Again, "PC's" should be "PCs".

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