I quite like it, although it could use some refinement.
The things that jump out at me immediately as needing work are the hairy water and the timid lines in the lower right corner.
When you're working on your lighting, try using a white colored pencil to add some highlights. I think that the water would look much better with some of that rather than the dark pencil lines. It would also help to add some contour to the stones of the bridge. Just a little bit along the lit edges of those blocks will give them a bit more shape.
The stuff in the lower right, I'm not sure what you're depicting there. The shapes make me think of rocks, but the color says bushes. The lines seem hesitant in comparison to everything else, so I get the sense that you're not confident about them.
Keep posting; I like to see more hand drawn maps!