When I started reading through this thread and looking at your first couple of WiP's I thought that the idea was well designed but a little "blah." Then I got to the last few WiP's with the insets and call outs and saw the halftoning on the screen image. This is a very strong piece.
It is very easy to feel like this is a screen capture of some program with roll-overs and such. Really top-notch stuff here.