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    Post May/June Light Entry: The Yawning Strait and Environs

    My first serious original map. All done in Inkscape. And yes, it's meant to be just black and white.

    The typeface is Junius-Unicode (Junicode)
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    I like it, have some rep!
    I like the different symbols you used and the layout of the terrain.

    Now, for some critique:

    - The map is a bit crowded at the moment. There's a lot of symbols and lines and text. Sometimes less is better.
    - The mountain ranges are thin, you might experiment with placing a few mountain symbols next to each other.

    Anyway, it's really a cool map!
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    I think it's terrific....must agree with Gand's comments though..but don't uncrowd it too much it's got a great look.

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    Quite nice!
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    For a light challenge it looks pretty darn sweet. As you progress, you might want to add more, and different, mountain shapes instead of just repeating a few, same for the trees. For now, though, this is very nice. Good job and do more
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    I'm with everyone else--very nice map, same critiques. My one original suggestion is you might try using a lighter shade of gray for some of the map features (not the font) and see how it looks. It might look extra crowded because it is such a bold dark color, and a little fade might give it a less crowded feel. (I may be totally wrong, fyi)

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    Making the font sizes of the text smaller, while spacing out the characters a bit, may help to reduce the "crowding".

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    I really like the look of the map. The main things which are in need of improvement are already mentioned.

    The only thing I have is a spelling issue... you are writing mountians instead of mountains (That is if it isn't intentional and in the language of the mapmaker mountains are spelled that way )
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    Thanks for the comments everyone. Here's a revised version.

    I was aiming for an overall 'cluttered' look though I'll admit I may have gone overboard. I've given in and included some grey. I've also improved the mountains and increased the number of unique mountains from 7 to 12.

    I've also started using the tweak tool a LOT.
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    I know I suggested going gray, but now that you've done it I don't feel like it made much difference. Sorry for the bad advice Perhaps another alternative is to go gray on the forests and black on the mountains. Having some color differential between the two might make it easier to separate them in the mind.

    Also, have you considered adding a highlight around the text so it doesn't blend in with the underlying terrain? I have a text background in my 'golden sands' that is just a feathered white background behind the letters. I feel like it draws them out without increasing their size or coverage too much, and might look good here.

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