Thanks for the REP. I did like your advice on fixing the walls, but I am waist deep in a private commission and other projects and just couldn't find time to go back and rework the whole thing. I have got to someday start working with layers so I can fix things quicker. Anyway, thanks again!
Continued The appended story on the last page of the entry hints that the expedition that found the shield sealed in a cave was mauled by a monstrous bear like creature. The other symbols in red are what red means to humans Danger. The wolves in a pack are deadly and the church because of the supernatural nature of this creature. Thanks as always for your advice. I guess I really failed to convey the nature of the beast ! I guess I should have made the path of travel from the cave to the meeting more prominent also.
Thanks for the input. I have a tendency to go too far down the Rabbit hole ! The shell of the Leather-back sea turtle isn't bone as a normal turtles is. It is cartilage . When the "Map was made it was totally black. The edges and the ribbing are the results of decades of rubbing away the coating. I wanted to simulate the wear(aging) of the "SHELL" and went too far. I thought that the mountains , hills, lakes farms and forests were a dead giveaway. Else wise I tied to think like a monster. With no tech means to measure distance it is scaled in nights travel. Moonrise to moon set symbolizing a nights worth of travel. The RED sun symbol over a boulder with the creature. "DENNED"beneath it Shows that the sun is feared by the creature.
OK, so, Why I voted for your map: The frame the shell sits on looks great, and the map being carved on a turtle shell is right in line with the Monster Mapping theme. I also liked that the map looks like it is some kind of map like information, but not in a format that a human would think of.
Why I almost didn't vote for it: The shell is to dark and the edges are to indistinct, they have a soft fuzzy edge. While I like that the map is not human looking, I don't like that the map is so different I'm not even sure if it is a map. I love the background story, it's very elaborate, but there is nothing in the story that leads me to think that the map was made by some kind of monster, I would just assume some primitive man made it. Still, the overall concept drew me in and that is why I voted for it.
Dear BOGIE thanks for the vote . It is traditional for me to solicit advice on my contest entries especially when they bomb so badly. It is the only way to Improve ! So if you can spare a few minutes what exactly was it that you personally found lacking in my entry “The Dark Journey “ Was it too simple ; Hard to understand : Too plain ?? Or something else ? I am asking so be blunt Thanks in advance for the advice ! It will help me Improve ! Sincerely lostatsea
Thanks for the Vote! The Support is always appreciated.
thanks Boogie. I like when I can get input. If you look at the front view the flowing appearance is mostly an Illusion. The forward "flow " is actually the Armor which is flared back to make crashing through dunes easier. The only deck area which should have been Non- rectangular is the bridge area which I didn't think about; so nice catch! As a whole it is supposed to represent a hand drawn deck-plan by the ship's Tinker (engineer) using a heat set ink and pencil. I overdid it perhaps on some of the layers. I guess the That Master Tinker Azured Torac isn't as steady of hand as he should be.!! I haven't voted yet I am having problem deciding !
"What did you like and what could have been better ?" I liked all the great maps and art, and it could have been better if I got a few more votes.... Oh, you meant about your map?
What I liked was the overall design of the ship and the presentation. What could have been better is the floor plans are all to rectangular, especially for a ship with such flowing outlines.
Thanks for your vote ! What did you like and what could have been better !
Thanks for your vote !