Your story was original and interesting, but as others seems to have answered already, I think that the background (shell & frame) doesn't work well with the map. It's too dark and too different, making the map elements either sharp, blurry or difficult to read. You got some excellent ideas here, though!
Dear Guilder. It is traditional for me to solicit advice on my contest entries especially when they bomb so badly. It is the only way to Improve ! So if you can spare a few minutes what exactly was it that you personally found lacking in my entry “The Dark Journey “ Was it too simple ; Hard to understand : Too plain ?? Or something else ? I am asking so be blunt Thanks in advance for the advice ! It will help me Improve ! Sincerely lostatsea