This is a pretty good map megahunter, you certainly have nothing to be ashamed of! It looks like you are using CC3?
The borders are a bit too much I think. There's a tutorial on this site how to do political maps. Maybe you can use it?
[Award Winner] Making Political Borders in CC3
Also you might want to give the labels a bit more bang. Maybe add a glow or something.
And lastly, maybe put the mountains a bit closer together and vary in their size.
Have some reputation as I think it's a cool map and you are definitely on the right track.