Page 3 of 4 FirstFirst 1234 LastLast
Results 21 to 30 of 33

Thread: One Page Dungeon WIP: The Underground River

  1. #21
    Guild Master Facebook Connected jtougas's Avatar
    Join Date
    Sep 2010
    Location
    Wales Massachusetts
    Posts
    2,813
    Blog Entries
    27

    Default

    Quote Originally Posted by RecklessEnthusiasm View Post
    Thanks a bunch, JT! There are some pretty awesome prizes listed on the O.P.D. page--here's hoping I can take a couple home.

    Will you be participating!?
    No. I can't really handle any kind of competition right now. (my challenge entries here are proof of that). For some reason it just shuts down my ability to map anything. Hopefully that goes away. Plus with the caliber of entries I wouldn't have a chance
    I am the breath of Dragons...The Song of Mountains...The Stories of Rivers....The Heart of Cities.... I am A Cartographer....

    Finished Maps
    Kingdom Of Shendenflar Campaign Setting (WIP)

    Everything I post is free for use and redistribution under the Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-Share Alike 3.0 licence, except where noted otherwise in the thread.

  2. #22

    Default

    That map looks great, nice job on the coloring and the transparency. If I was going to give you any criticism I'd say to take the stroke off the text, darken it just a bit and keep the glow around it. Maybe keep the stroke on the light colored call outs. As it is the stroke creates a kind of blur effect on the text making it harder to read.

    Best of luck!

  3. #23
    Guild Artisan geamon's Avatar
    Join Date
    May 2009
    Location
    Bronx, NY
    Posts
    616

    Default

    I'm entering RE, just trying to have something substantially completed before I post it.
    Cheers, Julien

    Battlemaps, Town Maps, Tutorials.
    All my maps and content are posted and published under this Creative Commons License. Click Here for information on licensing.

  4. #24

    Default

    Ascension - I appreciate it. Will you be entering this year?
    jtougas - that's a shame, I always love seeing what you come up with!
    DevinNight - Thanks for the advice! Is this version any better?
    gaemon - I'd love to see a WIP though! No need to be shy!

    I just noticed that the image has a higher contrast and grittiness in the thumbnail that I kind of prefer... Hm.
    Attached Thumbnails Attached Thumbnails Click image for larger version. 

Name:	OnePageEntry - Joshua Bennett.jpg 
Views:	986 
Size:	3.96 MB 
ID:	34537  
    Last edited by RecklessEnthusiasm; 03-21-2011 at 06:13 PM.

  5. #25

    Default

    in my opinion, much better. nice job.

  6. #26

    Default

    That looks great.

    (But you have a typo in encounter 3, it should be "indeed dynamite".)

  7. #27
    Guild Journeyer Facebook Connected anstett's Avatar
    Join Date
    Feb 2011
    Posts
    214

    Default

    Like the graffiti touch!

    BOB
    We do not stop playing because we grow old.
    We grow old because we stop playing.

    www.dragonslayers-society.org

  8. #28
    Community Leader jfrazierjr's Avatar
    Join Date
    Oct 2007
    Location
    Apex, NC USA
    Posts
    3,057

    Default

    fix speelin

    6. ..... Landing atop the it's back..
    My Finished Maps
    Works in Progress(or abandoned tests)
    My Tutorials:
    Explanation of Layer Masks in GIMP
    How to create ISO Mountains in GIMP/PS using the Smudge tool
    ----------------------------------------------------------
    Unless otherwise stated by me in the post, all work is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial 3.0 United States License.

  9. #29
    Community Leader jfrazierjr's Avatar
    Join Date
    Oct 2007
    Location
    Apex, NC USA
    Posts
    3,057

    Default

    fix... remove "the"

    6. ..... Landing atop the it's back..
    My Finished Maps
    Works in Progress(or abandoned tests)
    My Tutorials:
    Explanation of Layer Masks in GIMP
    How to create ISO Mountains in GIMP/PS using the Smudge tool
    ----------------------------------------------------------
    Unless otherwise stated by me in the post, all work is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial 3.0 United States License.

  10. #30
    Guild Expert rdanhenry's Avatar
    Join Date
    Mar 2009
    Location
    California
    Posts
    1,612

    Default

    4. Two "r"s in "barrels". "Well-placed" and "indeed" have also suffered letter pilferage. Dang goblins!
    5. The goblins would "poke" their heads out to take a "peek".
    6. As already noted, remove the "the" in "the its back". It barks? Really? I guess the goblins have truly domesticated it.
    9. To keep tense consistent change "catched" (which would be "caught" anyway) to "catches". It should be a comma rather than a period after "Pleeeze"
    10. "Alerted" - Well, we found one of those missing letters, anyway. Huzzah! Cave sharks!

Page 3 of 4 FirstFirst 1234 LastLast

Posting Permissions

  • You may not post new threads
  • You may not post replies
  • You may not post attachments
  • You may not edit your posts
  •