thank you all very much,

i really appreciated to receive criticism and also good comments, this will give me more enthusiasm and energy to continue with this crazy idea!
you really do not have an idea about how "much" your comments here are meant for me :-)

About the "grammar" mistake, im thinking to buy a good dictionary and stop using only the damned Google Translator :-D, im also
planning to study a bit better the grammar structure on George RR Martin saga, that inspired me to try this hard way of writing

i also think that i'll use Martin's novels to see how dialogue are written (as always for the "structure"), which is another very delicate part in a good fantasy book!

when some "dialogue" part are ready i will post them here :-)

Many thanks again,

Andrea