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Thread: February/March 2014 Lite Challenge: Story Mapping a Fairytale

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    I think two colors would help. But It might also help if the stories were continuous paths instead of branching. I can see that getting cluttered though. I'm sure you'll figure out what works best. I'm looking forward to it

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    OK I think this is the final one, unless its not.

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    Looks good!

    I'm still not entirely clear on what the story elements are. My thought is that they're parts of the story in a narrative sense but not in a geographic sense like the main path.

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    Quote Originally Posted by madcowchef View Post
    OK I think this is the final one, unless its not.
    I always tell that to myself too. I don't see what could be improved or added.

    Flocko: I think there is a bunch of secondary quests

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    I think you did a fantastic job.
    Beware, there are some typos; I spotted “childern” instead of children, “careles” instead of “careless” , “bargin” instead of “bargain”, “Christain” instead of “Christian”.

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    I clearly need a better editor than my cat. Thanks for all the corrections! Aren't straits the name for the land feature? Like strait of Gibraltar?

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    Yes that's the one I'm looking for. I intended to imply the lower edge of the Nation of Nursery Rhymes was not far off, thus creating a straits between the two land masses and the larger bodies of water on either side. Perhaps I should put the tip of it down, and remove the arrow in favor of labling it directly?

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    Again Again! Yet more of my complete-inability-to-spell based corrections and a couple of minor changes near the dire straits and compass which looked a little cramped to me.

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