July 2010 Entry : The Solur Nexedifice of Kharaghan

[Aval Penworth]

It really came together well. I find the blue stuff behind the text distracting, but everything else is very cool. Reminds me of a brochure for a resort or perhaps the Solur Nexedifice investment prospectus.

[ravells]

I'd agree with Aval on the blue clutter. It really doesn't add anything to the map.

[Crayons]

Hrm, the clutter is reflected sky/clouds on the gold surface of the mounting. It's possibly a bit late in the day but I'll see if I can re-render with smoother gold, see if it makes it clearer. I was going to put some blurb in about the plaque always magically reflecting blue sky and clouds regardless of where it is viewed but I'd written enough already and it seemed superfluous.

And, yes, Aval, it is esssentially a kind of "propaganda" / tourist plaque! Part of me was thinking about those sort of postcards you can buy with several small images rather than one big one. TIme to heat up the computers again!
Cheers!

[Crayons]

It took this long and I have a sneaky suspicion I've probably messed up something but can't see it!
I think you're right Aval, and ravells, I think the text is clearer here, so seeing that this forum isn't locked off yet...
Thanks for the critique!

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[Gidde]

Yeah, that's much easier to read.

[Crayons]

I was right about missing something and Aval very kindly pointed it out to me. At least I hope I corrected the same things as he spotted! There were a couple of crimson background patches showing from behind both the inset images and the border
Thanks Aval !

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[Redrobes]

Interesting read this. Its very hard to map something on a cliff and get a sense of depth to it and this seems to have achieved it very well. You have all the attachments and wip tags fine btw. This one is a strong entrant tho the competition is all pretty strong this month. Good luck with it.