June 2008 Entry: Stormlit Cloister (Groam)

[Redrobes]

Theres still an 'h' missing tho yes ? You have Amphiteatre instead of Amphitheatre.

[ravells]

Yikes! Thanks...I'll amend and repost!

:: Edit :: Done - and I had to sneak in one of those cool symbol fonts that Jaerdaph found.

[Sigurd]

Its very pretty, but I think the red numbers are too lurid for my tastes. Just my .02.

I love the attention you pay to the wall outline. It really suggests interesting stone work.


Sigurd

[Torq]

Great work Ravs. I think the whole thing turned out beautifully. I'm already thinking of how to use the cloister in an existing game I'm playing. It may even be big enough to use in a VTT. I like the bright, colourful pulp stlye but I think that the actual floorplan may get lost amidst the brighter colours. I feel its so detailed and architectural, as well as beautifully coloured that it should be focal point of the map, but it seems to be be fighting for attention a bit, amidst the bright labels, title, border and symbols.

Torq

[ravells]

Thanks for the feedback guys. I spent hours trying to find a decent background for this. Because the colour scheme on the map is so light, a dark background made it pop more.

I was trying to get a sense of drama into the map - 'Stormlit cloister' suggests to me deep, bright sunset like reds behind a mountain - hence the choice of the colouring of the Title.

And then I went a bit mad with super saturated colours which really stand off the page!, but you're absolutely right, the map gets lost among all the other elements.

I think I might try again with the composition and make a series of different choices on how to present the map.

[ravells]

How is this? Any better?

C&Cs gratefully received.

[Torq]

Massively cool Ravs. I really like it and I do think its an improvement. The plan now has centre stage. The latin inscription is a bit real world for Groam though isn't it?

Torq