[Award Winner] Creation and Depiction of Fantasy Cities - Parts I & II

[Midgardsormr]

Are you interested in proofreading feedback? 'Cause I've found a couple of errors already. First paragraph on page two: "In this guide I is an explanation..."

Third paragraph, same page: "you would not expect to see Bedouin tents in Arctic tundra any less than you would igloos in the desert"

That should read either "you would expect to see Bedouin tends in the Arctic tents even less than..." or "you would not expect to see Bedouin tents in Arctic tundra any more than..." The way it's phrased now makes it sound as though you should expect igloos in the desert.

No errors on page three (har har). If you'd prefer to keep your momentum going on new work, perhaps passing the document off to someone else to edit would be a good idea. Writing is fun, but revision is work, as they say. I'd volunteer my services, but I don't have software capable of editing pdf at the moment. I'm more than happy to keep proofreading, though, if it's helpful.

[ravells]

It's very helpful, thanks Mid! Keep going and post the revisions here and I'll amend accordingly.

[Midgardsormr]

My guess is that your introductory essay was the last thing you wrote, and you were eager to get it done, yes? I didn't find any glaring errors in the rest of the document, although the double 'l' in tranquillity threw me. I hadn't realized it could be spelled that way until I looked it up.

Very fine work, ravs! Five stars from me!

[ravells]

Thanks! Actually I wrote the introduction first, but I have a habit of going over and re-editing again and again and after awhile I get typo blind.

[NeonKnight]

I'll give a read momentarily. OFF TO THE POOL with the family.

[Ghostman]

Wow this is a gold mine of useful information. Can't wait to read the next part!

[Sirith]

Woah. I'm going to give this a good read later on, but this looks very detailed and interesting