Wayfairen's Passage

[Sharpe]

Oh, you're definitely improving! I've not been on this board in a long time and I noticed immediately your skills in particular have taken a leap since I was last around.

After a second look, one more edit: There, black-scaled leviathans haunt the channels of the lost, and

Oh, and you accidentally made three quotation marks at the start.

That should do it! i only nitpick because I like what you made. If I didn't like it, I wouldn't say anything.

[Ramah]

After a second look, one more edit: There, black-scaled leviathans haunt the channels of the lost, and

That last comma you suggest doesn't need to be there and would be frowned upon if the true grammar police came a knocking. Commas before the words "and" and "but" aren't necessary, although I admit I use them all the time. Still, forgetting all that I just feel the sentence reads better without it.