This is a pretty good map megahunter, you certainly have nothing to be ashamed of! It looks like you are using CC3?

The borders are a bit too much I think. There's a tutorial on this site how to do political maps. Maybe you can use it?
http://www.cartographersguild.com/showthread.php?t=3516

Also you might want to give the labels a bit more bang. Maybe add a glow or something.
And lastly, maybe put the mountains a bit closer together and vary in their size.

Have some reputation as I think it's a cool map and you are definitely on the right track.